Assignment #6

   Both essays are completely different and the way I set about writing them is also different. For my literacy narrative, it was easier for me to write it because it was like telling a personal story about myself. The audience was basically anyone because any random person would probably know what the essay is about. As for the ad analyses, I have to think about who I'm writing to and that can be a challenge. Also for the ad analyses essay I had to go into depth of the ad and describe it in a way where the reader doesn't need to see the ad. Each essay had it's unique challenges.

Assignment #7

    As a writer I feel I made some progress of getting better. I still have a lot of work to do before I can call myself an outstanding writer. Looking back at my first blog post it doesn't look like I made that much of a progress. This will take some time. The one part of the class that has been helpful would probably be discussing the topic we are writing about. It's helpful because it gives us an understanding of what we have to do on our essay. I would like to change the topics of the class. I want topics that are interesting to write about, something that is relevant to the students. Sometimes peer reviews are very helpful. I think it's better if we get paired off with new people each time. My writing process has changed dramatically because now I'm going back to my essays to make revisions. Back in the old days, my rough drafts would end up being my final draft. That is a big change for me and it will improve the way my essays get graded. Overall this class is really helpful, just change a few things like choosing the topics we want to write about.

Assingment #5

Purpose: The purpose of this ad is that it's telling every fat person out there to lose weight and in this case "lose the blubber." And since this is from peta, they call overweight people whales. Which is pretty offensive.

Audience: This ad is targeting overweight and is telling them to lose the blubber. I think it's mainly targeting woman due to the fact that there's a picture of a woman on the billboard.

Genre: I would not compare this ad to any others because this is pretty offensive. PETA is comparing overweight people to whales. That's pretty messed up.

Tone: The reason they chose this ad was because PETA is for the protection against animals, and that's why they used the quote "Save the Whales." And they are fighting to get people to eat vegetarian so that people can stop killing animals.

Assignment #4

   My final draft doesn't look too different than my rough draft. I didn't make any major revisions, I just made some minor ones. I fixed my grammar and added a few more sentences to my introduction because I had only wrote two sentences in my rough draft. I noticed that I tend to write incomplete thoughts, reading them out loud sounded so right but in the end it's a sentence fragment. I think peer review had little impact on the revisions I made. After re-reading my paper I found my mistakes and fixed them. The aspect that is strongest in my essay would have to be my background information. The personal experiences, I think really make it a strong essay. A weak aspect would have to be that it probably isn't the required length.

Assignment#3

    What is the difference between a C paper and an A paper? Obviously the A paper is a lot better. For me, using details is very important. I would rather write a paper that describes a specific situation with every detail so that the reader may have a clear picture of what's going. Another quality would be the thesis and the hook. If the hook and thesis is too short or just doesn't have that excitement in it, the reader will be turned away. Readers want attention grabbers, something that will get them to continue reading the text. The third quality would be the way the sentences run together. Sentences should run smoothly and not be all over the place. Having a nice transition from one sentence can have a big impact on papers.

    One thing I have trouble with, is probably sentence fragments. I tend to write very short sentences, incomplete sentences. It sounds right when I'm reading it out loud, but I'm guessing it's wrong. Another thing is, when I know something seems a little off, I try adding some extra words to make it sound better. In most cases I make it worse. I feel much comfortable if I just write in a way, where the reader feels like they've known me for a long time. I don't use too many fancy words. If I tried, I would have to force myself to think too hard, and that's not what I want.

Assignment #2

    My first topic I will be writing about would be about an essay I wrote last semester. It's about the effects of gangs. I talk about how gangs may start something with an innocent person for no apparent reason. This topic is very important to me because growing I had to deal with these "gang-bangers." It wasn't as bad as some people may think but they were still a problem to me. Now I'm fine, no problems at all. Back then it was. This topic was really easy to write because I can relate with some personal experiences. I feel that narrative essays are much more easier.
 
    The second topic may be about this personal statement I had to do my senior year in high school. I felt that writing a personal statement was hard to write, I don't like writing about myself. It's probably why it took me forever to finish the essay. I struggled at first, but once I started writing, the ideas just kept coming to my head. In the end I felt I had accomplished the mission!